Red brings food to visit her grandmother
You can’t say you bring food [to visit]. The food is NOT for the verb visit.
The food is FOR her grandmother.
Red brings food to her grandmother.
Red brings food and visits her grandmother.
A hungry wolf comes.
时间到了，我们要学点更好的单词表达行为哈。
A hungry wolf arrives
A starving wolf arrives ominously.
His saliva is a long river. haha is ok
He decides to wait at her grandmother’s house.
Remember to describe. Answer why. Stretch situation out into small details, and use conjunctions to connect them.
He (subj) decides (verb) [to set] a trap for Red
to set is an infinitive that turns ‘to set’ into a noun.
“a trap for Red” is a object complement.
conjunction ‘and’
[He] waits at her grandmother’s house.
Since we use and, we can carry over the subject.
He decides to set a trap for Red and waits at her grandmother’s house.
He arrives
Try to use more adverbs to describe your verbs.
He meticulously arrives
He sees an old woman lying on the bed. Good!
He eats the “appetizer”.
Let’s describe more and try to connect it.
The wolf sees the old woman as an appetizer.
The wolf devours her in one gulp
use ‘and’ conjunction.
The wolf sees the old woman as an appetizer, and devours her in one gulp.
When Red arrives, she sees her “grandmother” lying on the bed.
Let’s try to be more descriptive. Don’t use quotes to have the audience guess what you are meaning.
When Red arrives, she sees a big hulking figure lying on the bed.
It does not look like her grandmother at all!
It is the wolf actually.
Let’s not use actually. That word is used too much among Chinese students.
In fact, is it the wolf in disguise.
The wolf eats his “main course”
Jump, spring, hop, leap…各种各样的jump synonym 都可以用。
He leaps into the air.
In a gruesome scene, Red becomes his main course.
等于：
He leaps into the air, and in a gruesome scene, Red becomes his main course.