Daniel – Three Little Pigs

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Three Little Pigs

The three little pig lives in the forest, but

three means plural, we must use pigs, not pig.
since pigs is plural, we use standard form for ‘live’.

The three little pig(s) live in the forest.
subj = three little pigs
verb = live
obj = forest.

their mom kicks them out, so they need to build houses.

Their mom kicks them out, so they need to build their own houses.
Subj = their mom
verb = kick
object = them

subj = they
verb = need
object = to build
object complement = own houses.

The youngest pig builds a house with grasses.

Grass is an uncountable noun, so we just use ‘grass’.

The youngest pig builds a house with grass.

Subj = youngest pig
verb = build
object = house

The middle pig builds a house with sticks.

The oldest pig builds a house with bricks.

The wolf arrives in front of the youngest pig’s house, and sneezes.

We arrive ‘at’ starbucks.
I will meet you ‘at’ the park.

We use ‘at’ to describe meeting or arriving at some place:

The wolf arrives at the youngest pig’s house
Subj = the wolf
verb = arrives
obj = youngest pig’s house

Why did it sneeze? Try to connect the storyline with more details.

The wolf sneezes.

The house collapse, so

Please be more descriptive. Use more adjectives.
Remember 3rd singular, verb + s.

The grass house collapses.

Subj = the grass house
verb = collapses

the pig runs to the middle house.

Remember to capitalize the first letter of every first word in a sentence.
Also, use better vocabulary. runs –> escapes

The youngest pig escapes to the middle pig’s house.

The wolf follows the pig, and
comes to the middle house

The wolf follows the pig to the second house.

This is an example of a direct/indirect object.
subject = wolf
verb = follows
direct object = pig
indirect object = second house

The wolf sneezed, and the house collapses.

Remember to keep it present simple. Be more descriptive with adjectives.

The wolf sneezes, and the stick house collapses.

The wolf follows the pigs again, and
comes to the oldest house.

The wolf follows the pigs again.
They arrive at the brick house

The wolf sneezed, but the house did not collapse.

Everything in present tense please.
Remember to keep it present simple. And be more descriptive about nouns. ex: use ‘brick’ in front of house.

The wolf sneezes, but the brick house does not collapse.

The wolf gives up and leaves.

gerund vs present participle

Just focus on the following two things to find out the difference between a gerund and a present participle:

If an ‘ing‘ form of a verb (V1+ing) acts as a noun, call it a gerund.

If an ‘ing‘ form of a verb (V1+ing) acts as a verb or an adjective, call it a present participle.

Sierra’s Island Essay

A group of people goes to the beach.

They see a massive, gorgeous tree.

They want to climb the tree.

They climb on the tree.

One person hits the other people with a leaf.

Other people are furious.

They hit him and throw him down the tree.

He is dull.

He sits down under the tree.

He write a story about what things can people do when they are bored.

After he finish, he hides the book behind the tree.

The people on the tree climb down.

They find the book.

They bring the book to him.

He ask(s) them how did they know [he wrote this book]?

They said his name was written on the cover.

They put the book near him.

He quickly get the book and throws it away.

The book hits a cat.

The cat’s cry is deafening.

They give the cat a fish.

The cat take the fish away.

The cat brings a group of cats.

They also want some fish.

But the people are very destitute.

They only have one fish.

Someone said he has an idea.

His idea is [that] they go into the sea and catch fish for the cats.

Everybody says he is innovative, and then throws him into the sea.

Vocab by owen-12-27

grant (v) 授予

I grant him to get food.
We always say {grant sb. something}.
You can use {grant sb. permission to do something}.
I grant him permission to get some food.

They grant me to buy snack.
{Snack} is a countable noun. Use plural form here.
They grant me permission to buy extra snacks.

He grant me to help other people.
{He} is the third person singular, so add an -s at the end of the verb.
He grants me permission to help other people.

{Grant} is always used for some noble things.
The genie granted me my wishes.
I grant you permission to marry my daughter.

The Rabbit and the Turtle by Ricky Cao

Present Tense

0:00 The Rabbit and the Turtle

0:05 – A turtle (subj) lives (verb) in a [huge (adj) forest (noun)] (obj).

0:09 – His name (subj) is (linking verb) [Ted (obj)] (obj).

0:012 – Ted (subj) has (verb) [a small head (noun) and a long neck (noun)] (obj).

0:18 – [A big heavy shell] (subj) sits (verb) on his back (obj).

0:23 – The shell (subj) has (verb) square patterns (obj).
0:26 – He (subj) supports (verb) all that weight (obj) on four short legs.
0:31 – His green skin shines healthily under the bright sunlight.
0:37 – He has eaten bugs since he was a young turtle.

0:43 – Ted’s best friend Randi lives in the same forest.
0:47 – Randi is a cute rabbit with long ears.
0:52 – She has thick white fur, and a fluffy round tail.
0:58 – Her big bright eyes blink adorably.
1:02 – Randi has eaten carrots since she was born.
1:07 – The carrots give her energy to run fast.

1:13 – Randi is brash. She thinks she is the fastest.
1:19 – So she dares Ted to a race. Ted accepts.

1:25 – All the animals gather to watch the race.
1:29 – The race starts.
1:33 0 Randi sprints ahead.
1:35 – Ted slowly crawls forward.
1:38 – Time passes.
1:41 – Randi has ran a long distance.
1:44 – She does not see Ted, so she decides to take a nap.

1:51 – While Randi is sleeping, Ted catches up to her.
1:56 – Soon, he passes the finish line.
2:00 – The other animals cheer loudly.
2:04 – This wakes Randi.
2:07 – She jumps up and sprints to the finish line.
2:10 – She sees Ted celebrating. Randi loses the race and becomes humbled.
2:19 – She learns that slow and steady wins the race.

Vocab by owen-12-22

demonstrate (n) 证明
{Demonstrate} is a verb.
demonstrate (v) 证明

I demonstrate that I can swam.
{Can} is a model verb. It should be followed by the original form of a verb.
I want(verb) [to demonstrate] (infinitive/noun) that (conjunction) [I can swim].

I (subj) demonstrate (verb) my swimming (adj) skills (obj/noun).

I hate to demonstrate thing.
{Thing} is a countable noun. Use plural form here.
I hate to demonstrate things.

That demonstrate to me.
We always say {demonstrate something to sb.}.
They will demonstrate it to me.

Vocab by owen-12-21

orchard (n) 果园
I love to go to orchard.

{Orchard} is a countable noun, so we need to add an article here.
I love to go to the orchard.

The orchard has many fruits tree.
Use plural form here because you use {many}.
Also, we always say {fruit tree}.
The orchard has many fruit trees.

Vocab by owen-12-19

abundance (n) 大量
I have abundance snack.

{Abundance} is a collective noun. It can’t be used as an adjective.
Collective nouns can use ‘of’ to describe what it consists of:

A Group of animals.
An abundance of oil.

You can use the phrase {an abundance of}.
I have an abundance of snack.

They have abundance money.
The same reason mentioned above.
They have an abundance of money.

He have abundance food.
The same reason mentioned above.
Also pay attention to the third person singular.
He has an abundance of food.

asbestos (n) 石棉
Asbestos can be used to insulate a cooking stove.

Adverbial Phrase

Adverbial Phrases 状语短语

An adverbial phrase is a group of words that functions as an adverb (副词的作用).

Like adverbs, adverbial phrases can be used to describe

  • (哪里)WHERE –

    stow (verb) – pack or store (an object) carefully and neatly in a particular place
    规(gui)整(zheng)存(cun)放(fang)

    I stowed [the money] behind the bookshelf.

    She hid [her necklace] under the dinner mat.
    (“Under the dinner mat” is a phrase. It tells us where)

    The movie was filmed in Railay Beach.

  • (什么时候)WHEN –

    She has [a meeting] at noon.
    (“at noon” is a phrase)

    Let’s watch [a movie] after supper.
    (“After supper” is a phrase. It tells us when.)

    A crow attacked your cat about an hour ago.

  • (为啥)WHY –

    We’re going [to the market] to buy groceries.
    He went [to the island] to find gold.

  • (怎么) HOW –

    He fought like a lion.
    (“Like a lion” is a phrase. It tells us how.)

    He sings in a low register.
    他唱得很低沉 (cheng)

    He would always talk with a serious tone.
    语气严(yan)肃(shu)

Christmas Carol (middle school version)

The Purpose of a Character Analysis:

The purpose of a character analysis is to reveal details about the character that contains a moral message.

What Are The Character’s Distinctive Personality Features?

Scrooge has a lot of personalities. What are they?

Here are some adjectives to describe Scrooge:

  • greedy
  • ungrateful
  • Selfish
  • Heartless
  • unthankful

Thesis Statement

A thesis gives a single idea that the writer wants to argue for. This idea can be a claim or an observation. The topic (point) sentences in his body paragraphs should align with the thesis statement.

For example:

Scrooge was a cold hearted man, yet he changed for the better when three ghosts showed him the results of his:

Use the distinctive personality features here

  • greed – point of body paragraph 1
  • selfishness – point of body paragraph 2
  • and heartless actions – point of body paragraph 3

Now, your thesis becomes:

Scrooge was a cold hearted man, yet he changed for the better when three ghosts showed him the results of his greed, selfishness, and heartless actions.

How to write the Introduction

This is a character analysis essay so we write:

  1. intro sentence
  2. Then we write a thesis
  3. write a transition to connect the intro to the thesis

First, give some background information on the character. Introduce the character and his important personality traits briefly.

intro sentence In “A Christmas Carol” by Charles Dickens, the main character Ebenezer Scrooge was described as a selfish miser.

transition Dickens used the adjective cold to acquaint the reader with Scrooge. “The cold within him froze his old features, nipped his pointed nose, shriveled his cheek, stiffened his gait”. Most of Scrooge’s description was narrated using a direct relationship to the harsh effects of the winter.

thesis Scrooge was a cold hearted man, yet he changed for the better when three ghosts showed him the results of his greed, selfishness, and heartless actions.

Body Paragraphs

We use PEE. Point Evidence Explanation.

The first body paragraph talks about with each [personality trait] from our thesis. The first sentence is a mini-thesis that summarizes your point about Scrooge being [ungrateful]. This is the point of our (P)EE.

Mini-Thesis 1 – greed

Point The Ghost of Christmas Past showed Scrooge just how greedy he was.

Describe[leads into the evidence]

It took him to see Mr Fezziwig. Mr Fezziwig was Scrooge’s boss, and people respected him because of his generosity. For example, he was willing to pay a fair salary, and helped people financially in their time of need. The ghost explained to Scrooge that paying people their fair share of salary can make them much more appreciative and thankful.

Evidence “A small matter,” said the Ghost, “to make these silly folks so full of gratitude.”
Explanation Scrooge realized Mr Fezziwig had shown that a little bit of kindness goes a long way. Unfortunately, Scrooge never learned this lesson and had only paid his hard working employees a meager salary. He suddenly began to feel regret about how he treated his employees and the people in his life.

[2nd PPE]

Point
In addition, the Ghost of Christmas Past further implored Scrooge to evaluate his priorities when he was brought to a now-married Belle. The spirit lectured Scrooge on losing his past love,

Evidence “these are the shadows of the things that have been. That they are what they are, do not blame me.”

Explanation The spirit wanted Scrooge to see how his greed made him lose a life of love, which is something that money could never buy. Greed had doomed Scrooge to a secular life of a widower, and the very person he sacrificed money for had found happiness elsewhere. Scrooge suffered this terrible lesson, but a transition to enlightenment is obvious.

Mini-Thesis 2 – selfishness

Point The second ghost, the Ghost of Christmas Present, took Scrooge and showed him the hardships suffered by those whom he affected. Specifically, he took him to see Bob Cratchit, his employee. What Scrooge didn’t know was that Cratchit had a young son called Tiny Tim, who had a disability. The disability gave him a lot of discomfort, but he was joyful nevertheless for Tiny Tim was surrounded by a family that loved him dearly, especially his father. However, the second spirit firmly reminded Scrooge of his inhumane selfishness by echoing his own words used to drive away two men asking for a holiday donation,

Evidence “If he be like to die, he had better do it, and decrease the surplus population.”

Explanation The spirit linked Scrooge’s selfishness to his refusal to donate, and it directly affected the helpless and disabled. As Scrooge watched how Tiny Tim had to endure life, he was dismayed at himself and took a hard look at his past actions.

Mini-Thesis 3 – heartless

Point The third and final ghost, the Ghost of Christmas Future, zipped Scrooge forward into a bleak future. Scrooge saw that he was dead and no one came to mourn him. Instead he saw his dead body laying there, alone and unloved. Others either took advantage of his death by splitting his belongings, or felt relieved because they didn’t have to face him when rent was due. To make matters worse, Tiny Tim has died, and only Scrooge’s nephew lent some support. Scrooge’s transition completes and he laments with sorrow,

Evidence
“The Spirits of all Three shall strive within me. I will not shut out the lessons that they teach. Oh, tell me I may sponge away the writing on this stone!”

Explanation

His flight through time have shown that he was a greedy degenerate who ruined others with his despicable ways. Scrooge saw that greed, selfishness, and heartlessness has led him to the horrible fate he has witnessed with the Ghost. Faced with this realization, Scrooge’s transformation was complete. His heart confessed deeply, he had learned his lessons, and he transformed into a new man.

Conclusion

Re-instate your thesis
The three spirits of Christmas managed to transform Scrooge from an old miser to a caring and happy giver.

You can reference from your introduction. This gives is more impact.

His transition was only possible when the spirits made him see from a third person perspective. With each visit, his glasses of cynicism slips off some more, so he that could finally get a better look at reality.

Drive your point home

What Scrooge saw shocked him, and he never realized how his behavior had hurt so many. In the end, readers will identify with his transformation and feel a gush of inspiration when the ending reveals Scrooge’s warm hearted philanthropy. It is not only this transition of the protagonist, but that of the reader that Charles Dickens has masterfully orchestrated.